Firsts Exploration

First love: like skipping record/CD ... Oh wait, that's not it ... nope, still don't have it ... Gaps in memory, stopped recording ... heart stopped beating/froze

In love with idea of love. "I love you" forced at picnic. ("Ruined" steaks thrown at tree)

[Naive idea of being] In love (in stories): writing sonnets, singing serenades, electricity in kisses ... big grandiose efforts

REAL in love: very diplomatic, with O'Charley's as our U.N. building - "I never thought it could happen so soon and feel so natural." everyday simplicities: joy from waking up to warm morning breath, attracted even when comes inside from mowing lawn - sweaty and grass-stained. SHARING: nuzzling up and falling back asleep, cutting bushes/weeding while he mows, glass of cool soda/water waiting when he's done

Criticism

I see the beginnings of a good piece, but you've got to work it out.  Maybe start from your first kiss...and lead it through to finally finding your first - and forever - love.

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